now I'm not so sad. ^^*

2010-04-08 · 첨삭 강사 lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

Hellow , my name is [이름], nice to meet to you I,m very happy to know the power english program. Now I'm not good at speaking ,listening and more. After merried with my husband I have been lived as my husband's wife, and as my children;s mom. I think theses are important roles. but nowdays I'm very eager to find myself. sometimes I think , "where is my LIFE?" My life has gone after merride, so, somtimes I felt gloomy. But Isaid to myself "I love my husband and my kids very much, although I couln't come true my dream , I'm not sad. Csuse there are my dreams in my family. Step by step I'm going to walk to find myself, and to build my life . I believe that the power English will guide me to the good roads.

강사 첨삭

Hi Ms. [이름]. It's so nice of youto send this letter to me. I am happy to have you as my student. here are some revisions o your letter for you to study. God Bless Hellow , my name is [이름], nice to meet to you I,m very happy to know the power english program. >>Hello, my name is [이름]. nice to meet you. >>It's nice to meet you. I'm very happy to know the power english program.  >>I'm very happy to know about the Power English Program.  Now I'm not good at speaking ,listening and more. >>I'm not good in speaking the English language and more.After merried with my husband I have been lived as my husband's wife, and as my children;s mom. >>After my marriage, I've been a wife to my husband and a mother to my children.  I think theses are important roles. >>I thik these are important roles.  but nowdays I'm very eager to find myself. sometimes I think , "where is my LIFE?" >>But nowadays, I'm eager to find myself. sometimes I think, "where is my Life?" >>Sometimes I ask myself, "Where is my Life?"  My life has gone after merride, so, somtimes I felt gloomy. >>My life has gone after my marriage. So, somtimes I felt gloomy. >>So. sometimes I feel sad. But Isaid to myself "I love my husband and my kids very much, although I couln't come true my dream , >>But often tell myslef, " I love my husband and kids very much eventhough I couldn't make my dreams come true." I'm not sad >>Then, I'm not sad anymore. . Csuse there are my dreams in my family. >>Because they are my dreams for my family Step by step I'm going to walk to find myself, and to build my life . >>One step at a time, I will look for myself and build my life once more.  I believe that the power English will guide me to the good roads. >>I believe that Power English will guide and light my path for a good life ahead. Correction

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