Now that you have already retired from work, what makes your day long?
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I retired from work 2years ago. I worked at affice during 35years. That time I usually had a long day. I went to work and I had to sloved a lot of things. After work I went to fitness center and worked out.
Now I can enjoy my time. I go to the fitness center every morning. I do somethings that I want to do. This is study English, cooking, etc. Sometimes I go to trip with my husband. I want to go a lot of place. I feel I am very happy. It seems like this is my real life.
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Ms. [Name]!
Every one of us is looking for a great life after retiring from work. I am also anticipating that in the future.
Enjoy your life :)
Aki~
I retired from work 2years ago. I worked at affice during 35years.
>> I retired from work 2 years ago after working in an office for 35 years.
That time I usually had a long day. I went to work and I had to sloved a lot of things.
>> During that time, I usually had a long day. I went to work and I had to solve a lot of things.
After work I went to fitness center and worked out.
>> After work, I went to the fitness center and worked out.
Now I can enjoy my time. I go to the fitness center every morning.
>> CORRECT!
I do somethings that I want to do.
>> I can do things that I want to do.
This is study English, cooking, etc.
>> Like studying English, cooking, and so on.
Sometimes I go to trip with my husband. I want to go a lot of place.
>> Sometimes, I go on a trip with my husband because I want to go to a lot of places
I feel I am very happy. It seems like this is my real life.
>> CORRECT!
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