Nowadays, a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work. Do the adva

2022-01-20 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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It is a trend to make natural work place. Separate rooms or blocked structures make employees stuffy and stressful. Of curse these space and atmosphere make them focus on their works. However, I think that is not good for our mental healthy and give us press on the work. Therefore, the advantages outweight the disadvantages.

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
It is a trend to make natural work place. 
>>> It is a trend to make a normal work place. 
Separate rooms or blocked structures make employees stuffy and stressful. 
>>> CORRECT
Of curse these space and atmosphere make them focus on their works. 
>>> Of course these space and atmosphere make them focus on their works. 
However, I think that is not good for our mental healthy and give us press on the work.
>>> However, I think that is not good for our mental health and will make us pressured on work.
Therefore, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
>>> CORRECT

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