Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?
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I agree that food becomes easier to prepare improved the way people live. The reasons are as follows.
First of all, recently, depending on the fast change of society, more and more people tend to take less time in making food at home. They prefer buy or take out food from the restaurant or convenience store. We can easily find that there have various kinds of fast food displayed in store. It can save our time to make or prepare food.
Additional, this phenomenon can not be said without of the increasing number of the nuclear family.
The number of the family is not many unlike before. We do not have to prepare for many people.
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I agree that food becomes easier to prepare improved the way people live.
>> I agree that food becomes easier to prepare and it improved the way people live.
The reasons are as follows.
>> Correct!
First of all, recently, depending on the fast change of society, more and more people tend to take less time in making food at home.
>>First of all, many people tend to take less time in making food at home because of the fast pace in the society.
They prefer buy or take out food from the restaurant or convenience store.
>> They prefer to buy food or to take out food from restaurants and convenience stores.
We can easily find that there have various kinds of fast food displayed in store.
>> We can easily find that there are various kinds of fast food displayed inside the store.
It can save our time to make or prepare food.
>> Correct!
OR>> It saves time to prepare food.
Additional, this phenomenon can not be said without of the increasing number of the nuclear family.
>> YOU MEAN TO SAY. In addition, this phenomenon is not guaranteed with the increasing number of nuclear families in the society.
The number of the family is not many unlike before.
>> The number of families is not as many as it was before.
We do not have to prepare for many people.
>> We do not have to prepare for many people.
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