Nowadays many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of their life, how
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Work and life balance is the most important value that people would like to follow recently. Regardless of generation, people have tried to find balanced life. Especially, young generation stressed the importance of their free time after work. They don\'t care how much money they can earn but they care how much time they can spend. In 1960s, Korea were suffering from the shortage of food, so people worked hard until late night with minimum break time. People haven\'t thought about leisure because of overtime work. Our country has been developed continuously since then. We have few problem about eating, housing and clothing now. So, people tend to spend most of the money they earned without saving. YOLO is the representative expression that might describe recent aspects. However, I don\'t think these movement has only positive thing. Because old generation are not ready to accept new culture that can create conflicts between old and new employee. We are living all together so each should
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Work and life balance is the most important value that people would like to follow recently.
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Regardless of generation, people have tried to find a balanced life.
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Especially, young generation stress the importance of their free time after work.
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They don\'t care how much money they can earn but they care how much time they spend.
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In 1960s, Korea were suffering from the shortage of food, so people worked hard until late night with minimum break time.
>>> In 1960s, Korea was suffering from food shortage, so people worked hard until late night with minimum break time.
People haven\'t thought about leisure time because of overtime work.
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Our country has been developed continuously since then.
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We have a few problems about eating, housing and clothing now.
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So, people tend to spend most of the money they earned without saving.
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YOLO is the representative expression that might describe the recent lifestyle.
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However, I don\'t think these movement has only positive things.
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Because the old generation are not ready to accept the new culture that can create conflicts between old and new employees.
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We are living all together so each should...
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