Nowadays many people aim to create a balance between their work and other aspects of their life, how
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The \"YOLO\" and \"FIRE\" movement represent for aspects of life style which people would like to follow these days. The trends of life have changed to enjoy our life. The work and life balance has became the most important aspects among the people especially, millennials. People have different goals in their life but most of them want to be stable on their financial matters and mental sides. Everybody want to spend their time after work doing whatever they like. Some people would like to spend time with their family in the evening. Korea is known for the country which do overtime work a lot in the OECD countries. People have been sick and tired work a lot but we still have a lot of people who needed to do overtime work because of keeping their basic life. Our government have implemented the new law which restrict the working hour by 40 hours a week. Many people think that it will have a lot of positive effect but many people have complained about this policy because their income have
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The \"YOLO\" and \"FIRE\" movement represent for aspects of life style which people would like to follow these days.
>>> The \"YOLO\" and \"FIRE\" movement represent the aspects of lifestyles which people would like to follow these days.
The trends of life have changed to enjoy our life.
>>> Trends have changed to enjoy life.
The work and life balance has became the most important aspects among the people especially, millennials.
>>> The work and life balance have become the most important aspects among the people especially, millennials.
People have different goals in their life but most of them want to be stable on their financial matters and mental sides.
>>>> People have different goals in their life but most of them want to be stable on their financial matters and peace of mind.
Everybody wants to spend their time after work doing whatever they like.
>>> CORRECT
Some people would like to spend time with their families in the evening.
>>> CORRECT
Korea is known for the country which do overtime work a lot in the OECD countries.
>>> Korea is a country which is known for working overtime in the OECD countries.
People have been sick and tired work a lot but we still have a lot of people who needed to do overtime work because of keeping their basic life.
>>> People have been sick and tired working a lot but we still have a lot of people who need to do overtime work because of keeping their basic life.
Our government have implemented the new law which restrict the working hour by 40 hours a week.
>>> Our government has implemented the new law which restricts the work hours to 40 hours a week.
Many people think that it will have a lot of positive effect but many people have complained about this policy because their income have
>>> Many people think that it will have a lot of positive effects but many people have complained about this policy because their income has...
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