Nowadays more and more people want to get things done instantly. Why is it? Do you think it is a pos
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I think nowdays lifestyle is changed.
Most of the people purpose is money.
So, many people want to quickly handle all of the work.
This phenomenon is very negative development.
People\'s life goals are going in the wrong direction.
In the end, Money is not with us.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think nowadays lifestyle is changed.
>>> I think nowadays, people\'s lifestyle has been changed.
Most of the people purpose is money.
Most of the people purpose is money.
>>> Most of the people\'s purpose is for money.
So, many people want to quickly handle all of the work.
So, many people want to quickly handle all of the work.
>>> So, many people want to quickly handle all work.
This phenomenon is very negative development.
>>> This phenomenon is a negative development.
People\'s life goals are going in the wrong direction.
This phenomenon is very negative development.
>>> This phenomenon is a negative development.
People\'s life goals are going in the wrong direction.
>>> CORRECT
In the end, Money is not with us.
In the end, Money is not with us.
>>> In the end, we can never chase money for the rest of our lives.
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