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2020-10-20 · 첨삭 강사 Kelly

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Koreans were workaholic before when our country was the development country. We tried to escape from the poverty and wanted to not to skip every meals, so our ancestors worked and worked until late night. We still have a lot of people who work late. Some people think if employees stay at work late, they have right attitude. If not, people think that they aren\\\'t enthusiastic and passionate. In public officer groups, these phenomenon is more serious. Juniors can\\\'t leave the office until seniors go home even if they don\\\'t have anything to do. They just pretend to do something. However, people who were born in 1990s have been changed a lot in business culture. They have a strong belief and know expressing their opinions to everyone. I think it is a positive changes in Korea but we still have a lot of people who don\\\'t understand young people\\\'s thought. Especially, more older people is usually more conservative. I have seen news about life value of young people. Work and life balance i

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Good morning Mr. [이름]~! ^^ I think you\'re no longer busy so you can do your essays. Thanks. Keep it up~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Koreans were workaholic before when our country was the development country.
>>> Koreans were workaholic before when our country was under development.
 We tried to escape from the poverty and wanted not to skip every meals, so our ancestors worked and worked until late not. 
>>> CORRECT
We still have a lot of people who work late. 
>>> There are still a lot of people who work late. 
Some people think if employees stay at work late, they have right attitude.
>>> Some people think if employees stay at work late, they have a nice attitude.
 If not, people think that they aren\'t enthusiastic and passionate.
>>> CORRECT
 In public officer groups, these phenomenon is more serious. 
>>> CORRECT
Juniors can\'t leave the office until seniors go home even if they don\'t have anything to do. 
>>> CORRECT
They just pretend to do something. 
>>> CORRECT
However, people who were born in 1990s have been changed a lot in the business culture.
>>> CORRECT
 They have a strong belief and know how to express their opinions to everyone. 
>>> CORRECT
I think it is a positive change in Korea but we still have a lot of people who don\'t understand young people\'s thought. 
>>> CORRECT
Especially, more older people is usually more conservative. 
>>> Especially, many older people are usually more conservative. 
I have seen news about life value of young people. 
>>> I have seen the news about life\'s value of young people. 
Work and life balance... 
>>> CORRECT

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