Nowadays there is a growing trend of private car ownership. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvant
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It was my father\'s dream to have his own car about 30 years ago. There weren\'t a television and a telephone in my house at that time. Even public transportation, the time table of it was quite long between buses. However, people can afford to purchase a car at least more than one car in each household these day and the second hands market has been growing a lot. It makes people buy cheaper car than new car. Although, the public transportation lines has been extended around nation to various way, most people would like to have their own car because of its advantage such as comfort, fast and convenience. I have bought my first car in my 30s. It was second hand car. I regretted to buy it because there are a lot of things that I have to pay from taxes to consumable expenses. The oil prices were also burden for me because the price of it in Korea is quite expensive. We import it all from overseas. But I think that having a car definitely has advantage for people except money matters.
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It was my father\'s dream to have his own car about 30 years ago.
>>> CORRECT
There weren\'t a television and a telephone in my house at that time.
>>> There weren\'t a television nor a telephone in my house at that time.
Even public transportation, the time table of it was quite long between buses.
>>> CORRECT
However, people can afford to purchase a car at least more than one car in each household these days and the second hands market has been growing a lot.
>>> CORRECT
It makes people buy cheaper cars than new cars.
>>> CORRECT
Although, the public transportation lines has been extended around nation to various ways, most people would like to have their own car because of its advantage such as comfort, fast and convenience.
>>> CORRECT
I have bought my first car in my 30s.
>>> CORRECT
It was second hand car.
>>> It was a second hand car.
I regretted to buy it because there are a lot of things that I have to pay from taxes to consumable expenses.
>>> CORRECT
The oil prices were also a burden for me because the price of it in Korea is quite expensive.
>>> CORRECT
We import it all from overseas.
>>> CORRECT
But I think that having a car definitely has advantage for people except money matters.
>>> CORRECT
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