Obedient
학생이 쓴 원문
Theme: [ESSAY] Was there ever a time when you were not obedient? Give an example.
Yes. Sometimes, when my condition is bad, I don\'t want to obey everything.
And I don\'t obey when someone call me and order me that I don\'t want to do.
But usally, I obey my parents and adults.
It changes depending on my condition!
강사 첨삭
Here\'s your composition, Clair. Thanks for sending it.
Cheers,
Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] Was there ever a time when you were not obedient? Give an example.
Yes. Sometimes, when my condition is bad, I don\'t want to obey everything.
>> correct~~
>> or: I must admit that there are times that I become disobedient especially when I don\'t feel well.
And I don\'t obey when someone call me and order me that I don\'t want to do.
>> And I don\'t obey when someone calls me and orders me to do something that I don\'t want to do.
But usally, I obey my parents and adults.
>> But usually, I obey my parents and other adults. [Note the spelling of \'usually\'.]
It changes depending on my condition!
>> correct~~
>> or: Everything depends on my mood.
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