obese
학생이 쓴 원문
I think being obese is danger. it can led to many disease.
First, It can led to high blood pressure. High blood pressure is very danger. And Iif it is very serious it can led to die.
Second, obese can also led to sleep apnea, asthma, fatty liver disease and many other disease. it\'s all very dangerous.
So that\'s why I think obese is very danger.
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Thanks for this [이름].
- T. Beth
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I think being obese is danger. >>> I think being obese is dangerous.
it can led to many disease.
>>> It can led to many diseases.
First, It can led to high blood pressure.
>>> First, it can lead to high blood pressure.
High blood pressure is very danger.
>>> High blood pressure is very dangerous.
And Iif it is very serious it can led to die.
>>> And if it is very serious it can lead to death.
Second, obese can also led to sleep apnea, asthma, fatty liver disease and many other disease.
>>> Second, obese can also lead to sleep apnea, asthma, fatty liver disease and many other diseases.
it\'s all very dangerous.
>>> correct
So that\'s why I think obese is very danger.
So that\'s why I think obese is very danger.
>>> So that\'s why I think being obese is very dangerous.
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