obesity
학생이 쓴 원문
This is very worrying phenomenon.
The reason of alarming is that student\'s health is related to social costs and safety.
Specially children\'s obesity has a high possibility of causing- high blood presuure, daiabetes etc.
As student\'s obesity incerase, the cost medical care of goveronment increase.
This phenomenon is highly related to COVID 19.
강사 첨삭
Hello Ms. [이름]!
It is indeed alarming since obesity among young people is increasing, and it is not only happening in Korea. In the Philippines, we just went back to school this year and I noticed a big change among a few students that I know, and they really gained a lot of weight. Some mothers are even very proud of it which for me is not a good sign especially when they brag that their child eats double than them (parents)
enjoy the day!
Aki~
This is very worrying phenomenon.
>>> This is a very worrying phenomenon.
The reason of alarming is that student\'s health is related to social costs and safety.
>> The reason for the alarm is that students\' health is related to social costs and safety.
Specially children\'s obesity has a high possibility of causing- high blood presuure, daiabetes etc.
>>> Especially children\'s obesity has a high possibility of causing- high blood pressure, diabetes, etc.
As student\'s obesity incerase, the cost medical care of goveronment increase.
>>> As student obesity increases, the cost of medical care to the government increases.
This phenomenon is highly related to COVID-19.
>>> CORRECT!
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