October 3

2014-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

학생이 쓴 원문

October 3 is a national holiday in Korea. The day has been specified for memorizing the beginning of our country. The story of the day was not actually took place, it based on a made-up story that appears a bear and a tiger. Nowadays, many people in Korea have not thought about the meaning of the holiday deeply. They like October 3 just because the day is a free day. It is the same with me. Thanks to teacher's homework, I can have time to reflect on. I think it's necessible to think over why this day is important.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

Thank you for making your homework.

I like how you share your thoughts in here. You were able to

express your opinion or concern. I\'m happy for that.

With regards to your grammar, there are some errors but few only.

By the way, there is no such word as, \"necessible\", okay.

Be careful with that.

Anyway, you did good.

Have a wonderful day, [이름].

See you! :)

~~Teacher Kris

October 3 is a national holiday in Korea.

>>October 3 is the National holiday in in Korea.

The day has been specified for memorizing the beginning of our country.

>>Correct

>> OR: The day has been specified on how our country was born.

The story of the day was not actually took place, it based on a made-up story that appears a bear and a tiger.

>>The story of the day was not actually taken place. It is based on a folk tale that appears a bear and a tiger.
Nowadays, many people in Korea have not thought about the meaning of the holiday deeply.

>>Correct

>> Nowadays, many people in Korea haven\'t thought of the objective or reason why October three is a holiday.

They like October 3 just because the day is a free day.

>>Correct

>> OR: They like October 3 because you can all have the time to rest and do whatever you want to do.

It is the same with me.

>>Correct

Thanks to teacher\'s homework, I can have time to reflect on.

>>Thanks for the homework my teacher always give me because I can have time to reflect on.
I think it\'s necessible to think over why this day is important.

>> I think it\'s a necessity to think over why this day is important.

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