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I personally beileve that I preper to change about experience because If I have a lot of experience and get somethings
For example first, I can meet a lot of people. I like speak each other.
Seconds, If I am father, I can speak my life to my son about my a lot of experience.
last, I enjoy the travel during on holiday especially another place. I like try to something
So I personally beileve that I preper to change my life, if I can do it
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Hi [이름]!
This is a good start for your composition.
I like your ideas and your examples.
It\'s always good to give concrete examples.
Let\'s work on different sentence patterns.
You have to learn how to make different kinds of sentences to make your composition more meaningful.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I personally beileve that I preper to change about experience because If I have a lot of experience and get somethings
>> I personally believe that I prefer change because it means that I can get a lot of experience.
For example first, I can meet a lot of people.
>> For example, I can meet a lot of people.
I like speak each other.
>> I like speaking with others.
Seconds, If I am father, I can speak my life to my son about my a lot of experience.
>> Another thing is when I become a father, I would like to share my experiences to my son.
last, I enjoy the travel during on holiday especially another place.
>> Lastly, I enjoy travelling on holidays especially abroad.
I like try to something
>> I always like to try something new.
So I personally beileve that I preper to change my life, if I can do it
>> That\'s why I believe that I prefer change if it\'s something that I can make happen.
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