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Hi:) I even didn't hear your call because I came back home at 3 am so, I was very tired. I'm sorry that I made you call me continuously. Today is the start in a week. I tried to tell you about my weekend. As you know, I went to an amusement park "Lotte World" I experienced anniversary event over there by my boyfriend. Performers danced for me, he read a letter with a set image in a stage. I was shy but I was very happy. And I rided the rides with him. I was excited. It consists of indoor and outdoor places over there. There are the less scary rides in an indoor place. In an outdoor place, there are the more scary rides. Anyway, I had a very nice day. I recommend that amusement if you come back in Korea. Thank you for reading my story. And I'll surely answer your call.

  Hello [이름], Thank you for sending in this composition. I'm glad to hear that YOU had a great time at Lotte World. We'll talk more in class. Laters! -T. Kelly - Hi:) >>Hi. :)I even didn't hear your call because I came back home at 3 am so, I was very tired. >>I didn't hear you call because I came back home at 3 AM, so I was very tired. I'm sorry that I made you call me continuously. >>CORRECTToday is the start in a week. >>Today is the start of the week. I tried to tell you about my weekend. >>I will try to tell you about my weekend. As you know, I went to an amusement park "Lotte World" >>As you know, I went to an amusement park called Lotte World. I experienced anniversary event over there by my boyfriend. >>I experienced the anniversary celebration there with my boyfriend. Performers danced for me, he read a letter with a set image in a stage. >>The performers danced for me, while he read a letter with a set image on the stage. I was shy but I was very happy. >>CORRECTAnd I rided the rides with him. >>And I rode the rides with him. I was excited. >CORRECTIt consists of indoor and outdoor places over there. >>It consisted of indoor and outdoor places everywhere. There are the less scary rides in an indoor place. >>CORRECT In an outdoor place, there are the more scary rides. >>CORRECTAnyway, I had a very nice day. >>CORRECTI recommend that amusement if you come back in Korea. >>CORRECTThank you for reading my story. >>CORRECTAnd I'll surely answer your call. >>CORRECT