Oh my god~

I didn't notice my phone's battery was dead so missed your call.I'm so sad.Today is my birthday and unfortunately it is raining now.I came my home yesterday and had a birthday party with my family at night.My father bought a sweet white chocolate cake and USB, my mother bought musical Mozart tickets which is so popular now for my presents.I was so happy and the musical was really amazing and fantastic.Every actor and actress did really great job and the clothing,stage set and music were also very godd.I will not forget the musical forever and if I have a chance to watch it again,I'll do it.My sister lived far from house so called me and sang 'Happy birthday'song on the phone.Some friends of mine sent to text message to me.I bought a lotto for me at the first time just I wanted to try it.

Hi there [이름] I'm glad you enjoyed your birthday, and I wish for your other birthdays to be as exciting as it was. See you in class and great job again through this composition: I didn't notice my phone's battery was dead so missed your call.I'm so sad.Today is my birthday and unfortunately it is raining now. >>> All the sentences are all structurally correct I came my home yesterday and had a birthday party with my family at night. >>> I came home yesterday and had a birthday party with my family at night. My father bought a sweet white chocolate cake and USB, my mother bought musical Mozart tickets which is so popular now for my presents. >>> Correct I was so happy and the musical was really amazing and fantastic. >>> Correct  Every actor and actress did really great job and the clothing,stage set and music were also very godd. >>>Every actor and actress did a really great job and the clothing,stage set and music were also very good. I will not forget the musical forever and if I have a chance to watch it again,I'll do it. >>> I will not forget the musical forever and if I have a chance to watch it again,I'll watch it. My sister lived far from house so called me and sang 'Happy birthday'song on the phone. >>> My sister lives far from the house so she called me and sang the happy birthday song on the phone for me. Some friends of mine sent to text message to me. >>> Some friends of mine sent  text messages to me. >>>OR Some friends of mine sent me text messages. I bought a lotto for me at the first time just I wanted to try it. >>> I bought a lotto ticket for me for the first time because I just wanted to try it.