On a Sick day

2012-12-27 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Oh, Hello Alice. I think probably today was the sickest day for me this year maybe. I've been in good condition until 2 pm but suddenly I started to feel sick and painful, especially to my stomach. Until that time, I thought it would be better as time goes. However, unlike my expection, the bad symtoms started to be worse on and on. Finally, I requested the bus driver to stop and got off the bus alone. As soon as i got off the bus, I blindly ran to the edge of the road and began vomitting. And then, I managed to catch a taxi and I could go back to my domitary. It was so terrifying to come to think of it. Fortunately, I feel good not after having enough time to sleep. From this personal experience, I could learn "Sometimes, too much having food makes a person sick however the food health may be " On a second thought, the main culprit of my illness is contributed to overeating at the Chirstmas Party. In the future, I'll try not to overeat.

강사 첨삭

Hi there!

Thank you for your composition today! I\'m sorry about your bad condition. I hope that you will feel better. Take care and have a nice day!

T. Alice

Oh, Hello Alice. I think probably today was the sickest day for me this year maybe.

>> Hello, Alice. I think, today is the sickest day for me. 

I\'ve been in good condition until 2 pm but suddenly I started to feel sick and painful, especially to my stomach.

>> I was in good condition until 2 pm, but suddenly, I started to feel pain in my stomach.

Until that time, I thought it would be better as time goes.

>> I thought it would be better as time goes by. 

However, unlike my expection, the bad symtoms started to be worse on and on.

>> However, unlike my expectation, the bad symptoms started to get worse.

Finally, I requested the bus driver to stop and got off the bus alone.

>> Correct

As soon as I got off the bus, I blindly ran to the edge of the road and began vomitting.

>> Correct

And then, I managed to catch a taxi and I could go back to my domitary.

>> Then I managed to catch a taxi to my dormitory. 

It was so terrifying to come to think of it.

>> It was so terrifying. 

Fortunately, I feel good not after having enough time to sleep.

>> Fortunately, I felt good after having enough sleep. 

From this personal experience, I could learn \"Sometimes, too much having food makes a person sick however the food health may be \" On a second thought, the main culprit of my illness is contributed to overeating at the Chirstmas Party.

>> From this personal experience,  I learned that eating too much can make a person sick regardless of how nutritious the foods are. The main culprit of my illness is overeating at the Christmas Party.

In the future, I\'ll try not to overeat.

>> Correct

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