On balance, do you think that religions have made the world a better palce?
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Oh, it\'s such a difficult topic, I can\'t answer it. HAHA.
On balance, I think religion has made the world a better place.
There are many aspects of thinking that way, first of all, historically, when war broke out, it was a focal point and when there was discrimination, it allowed us to overcome it.
Also, if you think about the impact of religion on people, it makes you a person who can overcome difficulties and builds patience, and it seems to make people not live in disorder.
And I think it made people realize that everyone is a valuable person socially and helped them believe in the religion they want to believe freely.
But it\'s a problem because religion is causing another conflict and it\'s getting worse.
As religion is the subject of hate crimes, I think we should look carefully.
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Talking about religion is kind of sensitive to discuss with other people therefore, I appreciate you for making the time to share your opinion. ^^
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Oh, it\'s such a difficult topic, I can\'t answer it. HAHA.
On balance, I think religion has made the world a better place.
There are many aspects of thinking that way, first of all, historically, when war broke out, it was a focal point and when there was discrimination, it allowed us to overcome it.
On balance, I think religion has made the world a better place.
There are many aspects of thinking that way, first of all, historically, when war broke out, it was a focal point and when there was discrimination, it allowed us to overcome it.
>> Correct
Also, if you think about the impact of religion on people, it makes you a person who can overcome difficulties and builds patience, and it seems to make people not live in disorder.
Also, if you think about the impact of religion on people, it makes you a person who can overcome difficulties and builds patience, and it seems to make people not live in disorder.
>>Also, if you think about the impact of religion on people, it makes you a person who can overcome difficulties and build patience, and it seems to make people not live in disorder.
And I think it made people realize that everyone is a valuable person socially and helped them believe in the religion they want to believe freely.
But it\'s a problem because religion is causing another conflict and it\'s getting worse.
As religion is the subject of hate crimes, I think we should look carefully.
But it\'s a problem because religion is causing another conflict and it\'s getting worse.
As religion is the subject of hate crimes, I think we should look carefully.
>> Correct
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