On my business
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If i very hrad always talk to someone
sometime, i\'m consider my business when the company give me the stress or make me angry.
I have to follow up the ceo\'s instruction whatever who want.
IF I build on my business, I want to do handmade accesory shop.
Because my hobby is make some accesory like ring, earring, neckless or hand mede soap.
I have a talent for making accessory.
but i think it can\'t be make much money.So, this is second job appropriate. not a first job.
Some times my mother suggest to me what how about open the flower shop?
But, i don\'t want to open flower shop, because flower shop should be open early and i have to go a flower whole sales market every morning at 5am. It\'s too hard for me who sleeps a lot in the morning.
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Hi again [이름]!
I think opening a flower shop is not a bad idea :)
You may want to reconsider your mom\'s suggestion - hehehe :)
See you tomorrow!
If i very hrad always talk to someone
sometime, i\'m consider my business when the company give me the stress or make me angry.
>>> I always talk to someone when I\'m having a hard time. When the company stresses me out or makes me angry, I consider having my own business.
I have to follow up the ceo\'s instruction whatever who want.
>>> I have to follow the boss\'s instructions and do what he tells me to do.
IF I build on my business, I want to do handmade accesory shop.
>>> If I run a business, I want to run a handmade accessory shop.
Because my hobby is make some accesory like ring, earring, neckless or hand mede soap.
>>> Because my hobby is making rings, earrings, necklace, and handmade soap.
I have a talent for making accessory.
>>> I have a talent in making accessories.
but i think it can\'t be make much money.
>>> But I don\'t think I\'ll make much money.
So, this is second job appropriate. not a first job.
>>> Then, this is suitable for the second job, not a priority job.
Some times my mother suggest to me what how about open the flower shop?
>>> My mother sometimes suggest that I should open a flower shop.
But, i don\'t want to open flower shop, because flower shop should be open early and i have to go a flower whole sales market every morning at 5am.
>>> But I don\'t want to open a flower shop because I have to open it early and go to the flower wholesale market every morning at 5 a.m.
It\'s too hard for me who sleeps a lot in the morning.
>>> It\'s hard for people like me who sleep a lot in the morning.
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