On Sunday.

2010-04-05 · 첨삭 강사 janel

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On sunday, i went to Ha-Dong. it is famous for cherry blossoms in Spring. There are a lot of cherry blossom side of the road about 4km. can you imagine it? i could pass flower tunnel. it was fantastic. for it, i made a picnic lunch. for prepare picnic lunch i woke up at 6 am. it was little tired. and i daparted my home at 8:30 am. when we arrived at Ha-dong, it was 10:30 am. there was not crowd at that time. but when we depart from Ha-dong, the road was fill with cars. my friend and i thought we made good choice what we start our trip in early time. after then we went to Jin-ju castle. it is historical place. i enjoyed my weekend very well.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Here are your corrections.:)

>>>On sunday, i went to Ha-Dong.

>>>Correct

>>>it is famous for cherry blossoms in Spring.

>>>Correct

>>>There are a lot of cherry blossom side of the road about 4km.

>>>There are a lot of cherry blossoms on the side of the road- about 4 kilometres.

>>>can you imagine it?

>>>Correct

>>>i could pass flower tunnel.

>>>I could pass through a flower tunnel.

>>>it was fantastic.

>>>Correct. Better: It was fantastic!

>>>for it, i made a picnic lunch.

>>>I made a picninc lunch for it.

>>>for prepare picnic lunch i woke up at 6 am.

>>>To prepare the picnic lunch, I had to wake up at 6 am.

>>>it was little tired.

>>>It was a little tiring.

>>>and i daparted my home at 8:30 am.

>>>Correct

>>>when we arrived at Ha-dong, it was 10:30 am.

>>>When we arrived at Ha-dong, it was already 10:30 am.

>>>there was not crowd at that time.

>>>There was no crowd at that time.

>>>but when we depart from Ha-dong, the road was fill with cars.

>>>But when we departed from Ha-dong, the road was filled with cars.

>>>my friend and i thought we made good choice what we start our trip in early time.

>>>My friend and I thought that we made a good choice in starting our trip at an early time.

>>>after then we went to Jin-ju castle.

>>>After that, we went to Jin-ju castle.

>>>it is historical place.

>>>It is a historical place.

>>>i enjoyed my weekend very well.

>>>Correct

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