One day, three things I want to have

2020-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Oneil

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First, I want to have a positive mind. It makes me good realationship with everyone else. Second, I want to have immunity. It will help me stay healthy for a long time. Lastly, third, I want to have the present. I am happy now. And now it\'s forever. To have the present is to be here forever.

강사 첨삭

Awwww, your answer is a very nice one! It is so good I really admire the way you think. :) Thank you for sharing this with me. ^_^
See you in class tomorrow dear!
First, I want to have a positive mind.
>> Correct. 

It makes me good realationship with everyone else.
>> It makes me have a good relationship with everyone else. 

Second, I want to have immunity.
>> Correct. 

It will help me stay healthy for a long time.
>> Correct. 

Lastly, third, I want to have the present.
>> Lastly, I want to be in the present situation I am right now.

I am happy now.
>> Correct. 

And now it\'s forever.
>> And, now I hope this last\'s forever.

To have the present is to be here forever.
>> Being in the present is like a good forever for me. 

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