One Law for me

2020-01-06 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

학생이 쓴 원문

If I can write one new law for me, then I’m going to write that everyone has to send money which doesn’t have limitation to me. It’s quite decent law. There’s no crime and strains. Everybody easily cough up it. Then, the money in my account will arise dramatically. then, I don’t need to work around the clock. But the my name should be concealed by them. Because of my private life. Also, my face has to be in confidential. I can not imagine how it would be wonderful.

강사 첨삭

Hey, [이름]! Thanks for sending in your composition. That\'s quite a funny law you\'ve thought of, but very practical indeed. I\'d love to know more in class. See you! ^_^

~T.Avery

If I can write one new law for me, then I’m going to write that everyone has to send money which doesn’t have limitation to me.

>> CORRECT

OR>> If I can write one new law, then I’m going to create a rule wherein everyone has to send limitless money to me.

It’s quite decent law.

>> It’s quite a decent law.

There’s no crime and strains.

>> CORRECT

Everybody easily cough up it.

>> CORRECT
Then, the money in my account will arise dramatically.

>> CORRECT

then, I don’t need to work around the clock.

>> CORRECT

OR>> Therefore, I wouldn\'t need to work 24/7.
But the my name should be concealed by them. Because of my private life.

>> However, my name should be concealed by them because it might affect my private life.

Also, my face has to be in confidential.

>> Also, my face has to be confidential.

I can not imagine how it would be wonderful.

>> CORRECT

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