One Law for me
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hey, [이름]! Thanks for sending in your composition. That\'s quite a funny law you\'ve thought of, but very practical indeed. I\'d love to know more in class. See you! ^_^
~T.Avery
If I can write one new law for me, then I’m going to write that everyone has to send money which doesn’t have limitation to me.
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OR>> If I can write one new law, then I’m going to create a rule wherein everyone has to send limitless money to me.
It’s quite decent law.
>> It’s quite a decent law.
There’s no crime and strains.
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Everybody easily cough up it.
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Then, the money in my account will arise dramatically.
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then, I don’t need to work around the clock.
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OR>> Therefore, I wouldn\'t need to work 24/7.
But the my name should be concealed by them. Because of my private life.
>> However, my name should be concealed by them because it might affect my private life.
Also, my face has to be in confidential.
>> Also, my face has to be confidential.
I can not imagine how it would be wonderful.
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