One of the famous hobby in the world
학생이 쓴 원문
When I heard the word \'camping\', the first thought that comes to mind is \'famous hobby\'. When I watch Korea TV show, lots of celebrities showed how they enjoy their camping. I believe many people got interested in camping because of the celebrities and now camping became famous hobby to people. Nowadays, there are lots of stores that sells camping gears. I think this shows that how much people have interest in camping.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, Melody! (^_^)
Camping is a well-liked outdoor activity because it provides an inexpensive way for individuals to unplug from technology and re-establish a connection with the natural world.
It strengthens social ties with family and friends while fostering mental and physical well-being through leisure, exercise, and fresh air.
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When I heard the word \'camping\', the first thought that comes to mind is \'famous hobby\'.
>>> When I hear the word \'camping,\' the first thought that comes to mind is it\'s a famous hobby.
When I watch Korea TV show, lots of celebrities showed how they enjoy their camping.
>>> When I watch Korean TV shows, many celebrities show how they enjoy camping.
I believe many people got interested in camping because of the celebrities and now camping became famous hobby to people.
>>> I believe many people became interested in camping because of those celebrities, and now camping has become a famous hobby.
Nowadays, there are lots of stores that sells camping gears.
>>> Nowadays, there are a lot of stores that sell camping gears.
I think this shows that how much people have interest in camping.
>>> I think this shows how much people are interested in camping.
>>> OR: I believe this demonstrates the level of interest in camping.
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