One of thing that robot can\'t: kindness
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I think the most important thing is kindness. Of course, intelligence and beauty are also important, but kindness is the most important thing. I\'ll cite two reason why kindness is the most important thing.
First, robot\'s intelligence is better than human. Robot\'s IQ is about 10000. Usual genius\'s IQ is about 180.So, if some person is very smart, but not kind, than the person is human that is worse than robot. But kind person has thing that better than robot.
Second, if we want to be beautiful, we can change our beauty easily. But kindness is very hard to change. Frankly, human\'s important thing is kindness, not beauty.
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I think the most important thing is kindness.
>> This is a good sentence.
Of course, intelligence and beauty are also important, but kindness is the most important thing.
>> Of course intelligence and beauty are also important, but kindness is the most important thing.
I\'ll cite two reason why kindness is the most important thing.
>> I\'ll cite two reasons why it is the most important thing.
First, robot\'s intelligence is better than human.
>> First, robots are smarter than humans.
Robot\'s IQ is about 10000.
>> A robot\'s IQ is about 1000.
Usual genius\'s IQ is about 180.
>> Usually, a genius IQ is about 180.
So, if some person is very smart, but not kind, than the person is human that is worse than robot.
>> If a person is very smart but unkind, he/she is worse than a robot.
But kind person has thing that better than robot.
>> However, a kind person is better than a robot.
Second, if we want to be beautiful, we can change our beauty easily.
>> Second, if we want to be beautiful, we can change our appearance easily.
But kindness is very hard to change.
>> However, kindness is very hard to change.
Frankly, human\'s important thing is kindness, not beauty.
>> Therefore, kindness, not beauty, should be more important for humans.
Hello, Daniel! Thanks for your effort in writing your homework. Review the corrections for your improvement.
>> This is a good sentence.
Of course, intelligence and beauty are also important, but kindness is the most important thing.
>> Of course intelligence and beauty are also important, but kindness is the most important thing.
I\'ll cite two reason why kindness is the most important thing.
>> I\'ll cite two reasons why it is the most important thing.
First, robot\'s intelligence is better than human.
>> First, robots are smarter than humans.
Robot\'s IQ is about 10000.
>> A robot\'s IQ is about 1000.
Usual genius\'s IQ is about 180.
>> Usually, a genius IQ is about 180.
So, if some person is very smart, but not kind, than the person is human that is worse than robot.
>> If a person is very smart but unkind, he/she is worse than a robot.
But kind person has thing that better than robot.
>> However, a kind person is better than a robot.
Second, if we want to be beautiful, we can change our beauty easily.
>> Second, if we want to be beautiful, we can change our appearance easily.
But kindness is very hard to change.
>> However, kindness is very hard to change.
Frankly, human\'s important thing is kindness, not beauty.
>> Therefore, kindness, not beauty, should be more important for humans.
Hello, Daniel! Thanks for your effort in writing your homework. Review the corrections for your improvement.
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