One thing that I want to change
학생이 쓴 원문
If I could change one thing about my hometown, I want to make a space where I can enjoy my free time. It is not that I don’t have a place to play but many people from my hometown say we have nowhere to go. When i want to spend my free time, It is hard for me to find a place to go too. So I think it would be nice to see musical or photo exhibition in my hometown.
강사 첨삭
I think that\'s a wonderful idea, Rian. ^^
Thank you for your composition.
I hope you have a wonderful weekend!~
~t. Ally
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If I could change one thing about my hometown, I want to make a space where I can enjoy my free time. It is not that I don’t have a place to play but many people from my hometown say we have nowhere to go. When i want to spend my free time, It is hard for me to find a place to go too. So I think it would be nice to see musical or photo exhibition in my hometown.
>> If I could change one thing about my hometown, I want them to create a space where I can enjoy my free time. It\'s not that I don\'t have space to play in, but many people from my hometown say we have nowhere to go for such things. When I want to spend my free time, it is hard for me to find a place to go to. So I think it would be nice to see a musical or photo exhibition in my hometown.
>> If I could change one thing about my hometown, I want them to create a space where I can enjoy my free time. It\'s not that I don\'t have space to play in, but many people from my hometown say we have nowhere to go for such things. When I want to spend my free time, it is hard for me to find a place to go to. So I think it would be nice to see a musical or photo exhibition in my hometown.
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