Online shopping
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Online shopping is very convenient and reduces our shopping time. However, it has some problems. Excessive packaging of products generates waste, which is bad to the environment. Moreover, online shopping doesn’t require salespeople, so many people may lose their jobs.
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Online shopping is very convenient and reduces our shopping time.
>>> Online shopping is very convenient and cuts down on the time spent shopping.
However, it has some problems.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
OR>>> However, it does come with a few drawbacks.
Excessive packaging of products generates waste, which is bad to the environment.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Moreover, online shopping doesn’t require salespeople, so many people may lose their jobs.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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