Only a person who risks is free
학생이 쓴 원문
I think taking risks is a double-edged sword. Like\"no pain no gain\", we cannot accomplish something great without taking risks. Especially in business fields, there are many risks such as investing or introducing a new system. Actually I took some risks in opening and managing my academy. And I purchased my current house when our country was going through IMF. I thought that crisis is a opportunity to do things.
But taking risks sometimes brings unpleasant and hazardous results. As I am older, I am cautious and careful. I try to avoid talking risks .
강사 첨삭
Hello, Gi [이름]!
I agree with you! Every risk we take is an opportunity for learning and discovering our strengths and full potential. If there are no risks, I think there would be no growth as well. However, I also think that we should be accountable and be able to assess potential consequences with the risks that we are planning to make.
- T. Caitlyn
I think taking risks is a double-edged sword.
>> CORRECT
Like\"no pain no gain\", we cannot accomplish something great without taking risks.
>> CORRECT
Especially in business fields, there are many risks such as investing or introducing a new system.
>> CORRECT
Actually, I took some risks in opening and managing my academy.
>> CORRECT
And I purchased my current house when our country was going through IMF.
>> CORRECT
I thought that crisis is a opportunity to do things.
>> I thought that a crisis is an opportunity to do things.
But taking risks sometimes brings unpleasant and hazardous results.
>> CORRECT
As I am older, I am cautious and careful.
>> CORRECT
I try to avoid talking risks .
>> I try to avoid taking risks.
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