opic 3 homework

2019-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Fiona

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I reside at the west side of Sejong city. It is not well-modernized. My neighborhood has its own peaceful mood, and it makes me relaxed. The price of everything is cheaper than the center of sejong because my neighborhood is in a university town. The bad thing about my neiborhood is that it becomes empty street during the vacation. But I like my neighborhood because I love this tranquer mood and strangely, it grows on me.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon^^ 
Wow, you seem to be living in a peaceful and very comfortable place. Which of course a lot of people would love to stay when they are so stressed with the city life. 

Thanks for your response.^^ 
Enjoy the rest of the day! 
I reside at the west side of Sejong city. 
>>I reside on the west side of Sejong city.
OR: I live in the west of Sejong City.
It is not well-modernized. 
>>CORRECT!
OR: It\'s not very modernized.
My neighborhood has its own peaceful mood, and it makes me relaxed. 
>>Our neighborhood has its own peaceful atmosphere, so I feel relaxed. 
OR: Our neighborhood has its own peaceful atmosphere, so I feel comfortable.
The price of everything is cheaper than the center of sejong because my neighborhood is in a university town. 
>>Everything\'s cheaper than in the center of Sejong because my neighborhood is near Universities. 
The bad thing about my neiborhood is that it becomes empty street during the vacation.
>>The bad thing about our neighborhood is that it becomes an empty street during the vacation.
 But I like my neighborhood because I love this tranquer mood and strangely, it grows on me.
>>But I like my neighbor because I like this tranquility mood and strangely enough, it affects me.

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