Our company\'s financial difficulty
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I am working in company named Doosan Heavy Industry as civil designer.
Our company provide service related with power and water solution.
For example, We have built many power plant in the world including india, vietnam, saudi etc..
Many desalinate plants are built by our company in the middle east country where they are under lack of drinking water.
Nuclear power plant from our company is top selling product in korea as well.
Recently, Doosan Heavy Industry has financial difficulty derived from government policy.
The policy name is \"Exit Nuclear Power Plant\" which come into effect at 2 years ago.
Korea has many Nuclear Power Plant more than 40~50, No more nuclear power plant will be allowed to build in korea because of policy.
After that, almost 1/3 of our company\'s profit is disappeared.
It is main reason about out financial difficulty.
Now, our company are trying to expand our business line to mitigate financial difficulties.
Our new business line will be described in next write.
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I am working in company named Doosan Heavy Industry as civil designer.
>> I am working Doosan Heavy Industry as a civil designer.
Our company provide service related with power and water solution.
>> Our company provides services related to power and water solution.
For example, We have built many power plant in the world including india, vietnam, saudi etc..
>> For example, we build and have built a lot of power plants around the world including India, Vietnam, Saudi, and many more.
Many desalinate plants are built by our company in the middle east country where they are under lack of drinking water.
>> Most desalinate plants in some Middle East countries that lack drinking water were built by my company.
Nuclear power plant from our company is top selling product in korea as well.
>> The nuclear power plant from our company is a top-selling product in Korea as well.
Recently, Doosan Heavy Industry has financial difficulty derived from government policy.
>> Recently, Doosan Heavy Industry is having a financial difficulty derived from government policy.
The policy name is \"Exit Nuclear Power Plant\" which come into effect at 2 years ago.
>> That policy is known as the \"Exit Nuclear Power Plant\" which was effective 2 years ago.
Korea has many Nuclear Power Plant more than 40~50, No more nuclear power plant will be allowed to build in korea because of policy.
>> Korea has a lot of nuclear power plants, more than 40~50 plants to be exact.
No more nuclear power plant will be allowed to build in korea because of policy.
>> Now, our government will no longer allow us to build more nuclear power plants because of this policy.
After that, almost 1/3 of our company\'s profit is disappeared.
>> Since then, our company lost 1/3 of its profit.
It is main reason about out financial difficulty.
>> It is the main reason why we are going through financial difficulty.
Now, our company are trying to expand our business line to mitigate financial difficulties.
>> Now, our company is trying to expand our business line to mitigate financial difficulties.
Our new business line will be described in next write.
>> I will tell you about our company\'s new business line in my next composition.
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