Outgoing personality!
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Outgoing personality is one of my favorite. When I lived in Turkey for exchange student, I really wanted to talk with friends. Turkish can speak in English but not well, so I had to learn Turkish. Thanks to my friendly personality, I could conversate with my roommate in Turkish pretty well. And still now, I remember some Turkish words. I was also able to make good relationship with my boss when I was working. I always approached first and talk to him. Finally, I could learn much more skills than others. Therefore, I will keep my personality extrovert and develop this trait much better for my self and my life:)
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Jasmin
Outgoing personality is one of my favorite.
>>I\'m an outgoing person.
When I lived in Turkey for exchange student, I really wanted to talk with friends.
>> Back when I was an exchange student in Turkey, I wanted to make some friends so I can talk to someone.
Turkish can speak in English but not well, so I had to learn Turkish.
>>Turkish can speak in English but they are not fluent. So I had to learn their language.
Thanks to my friendly personality, I could conversate with my roommate in Turkish pretty well. And still now, I remember some Turkish words.
>>Thanks to my friendly personality, I could conversate with my roommate in Turkish language pretty well. Until now I can still remember some of the Turkish words.
I was also able to make good relationship with my boss when I was working.
>>I was able to build a good relationship with my boss when I was working.
I always approached first and talk to him. Finally, I could learn much more skills than others.
>> I always approached him first that\'s why I got to learn new skills from him than the others.
Therefore, I will keep my personality extrovert and develop this trait much better for my self and my life:)
>> Therefore, I will continue to develop my personable skills for my own sake.
Jasmin
Outgoing personality is one of my favorite.
>>I\'m an outgoing person.
When I lived in Turkey for exchange student, I really wanted to talk with friends.
>> Back when I was an exchange student in Turkey, I wanted to make some friends so I can talk to someone.
Turkish can speak in English but not well, so I had to learn Turkish.
>>Turkish can speak in English but they are not fluent. So I had to learn their language.
Thanks to my friendly personality, I could conversate with my roommate in Turkish pretty well. And still now, I remember some Turkish words.
>>Thanks to my friendly personality, I could conversate with my roommate in Turkish language pretty well. Until now I can still remember some of the Turkish words.
I was also able to make good relationship with my boss when I was working.
>>I was able to build a good relationship with my boss when I was working.
I always approached first and talk to him. Finally, I could learn much more skills than others.
>> I always approached him first that\'s why I got to learn new skills from him than the others.
Therefore, I will keep my personality extrovert and develop this trait much better for my self and my life:)
>> Therefore, I will continue to develop my personable skills for my own sake.
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