Parenting and punishment

2018-09-09 · 첨삭 강사 Vance

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Hello, I would like to introduce you to the punishment i received at school or at home. I've never been punished so severely. So let me introduce you to some of the light punishments I've received so far. First, there is the punishment that I got when I was in third grade. This is not my fault, but my classmates were all punished for making fun of me in class. This punishment is called "Motorcycle". As this punishment was the hardest and most severe punishment I received, I was the first and most memorable. Moreover, I remember getting this bee in PE class made me feel worse. Second is cleaning. In a way, I prefer cleaning to my previous punishment. The previous punishment is not only because it consumes physical education but also because it hurts. However, since the punishment is in after-school hours, you should try your best as soon as possible because you can be late for hagwons if you do something wrong. Today I had a chance to introduce myself to the punishment I have received. I think you should try not to be punished as much as possible.

강사 첨삭

Hello, I would like to introduce you to the punishment i received at school or at home. I\'ve never been punished so severely. 
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So let me introduce you to some of the light punishments I\'ve received so far. 
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First, there is the punishment that I got when I was in third grade. This is not my fault, but my classmates were all punished for making fun of me in class. 
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This punishment is called \"Motorcycle\". As this punishment was the hardest and most severe punishment I received, I was the first and most memorable. 
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Moreover, I remember getting this bee in PE class made me feel worse. 
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Second is cleaning. In a way, I prefer cleaning to my previous punishment. The previous punishment is not only because it consumes physical education but also because it hurts. 
>>Second is cleaning. In a way, I prefer cleaning than my previous punishment. The previous punishment is not only because it consumes physical labor but also because it hurts. 


However, since the punishment is in after-school hours, you should try your best as soon as possible because you can be late for hagwons if you do something wrong.
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Today I had a chance to introduce myself to the punishment I have received. I think you should try not to be punished as much as possible.
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