parents affect their children
학생이 쓴 원문
my father is very strict and has a lot of rules. he makes me very sensitive to everything.
he doesn\'t like talking back and wants to follow his words.
it finds me difficult to express myself.
I takes after my father.
I have two children.
I had difficulty in talking with them.
now I try to listen to their stories.
강사 첨삭
Here\'s your corrected composition, Judy. Please go over the revisions given below. Happy Friday!
Cheers,
Jean~~
my father is very strict and has a lot of rules. he makes me very sensitive to everything.
>>> My father is very strict and has many rules, which have made me very sensitive to everything.
he doesn\'t like talking back and wants to follow his words.
it finds me difficult to express myself.
>>> He dislikes being questioned and expects his words to be obeyed, which makes it hard for me to express my thoughts.
I takes after my father.
>>> I take after my father.
I have two children. I had difficulty in talking with them.
>>> I have two children, and I have difficulty talking with them.
now I try to listen to their stories.
>>> I’m working on being more attentive when they share their stories.
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