Parents should intervene to children\'s shopping
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, children have to be allowed by their parents. Because most of the children have slow and short judgement so parents help their children. If there is some goods that children want to buy, then the children who have short judgement may buy them without any thinks. In addition, if children can buy anything without any intervention of parents, they could buy something that even the price is 100$. I think it can have a bad influence to children\'s sense of economy. In conclusion, I think parents should help their children to buy something for proper price.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Daniel! Thank you for answering
your homework. However, you have to be more careful with sentence construction and word usage.
- Teacher Debbie
Homework: Do you think kids should be allowed by their parents to shop online without their supervision? Why or why not?
In my opinion, children have to be allowed by their parents.
>> In my opinion, children should be supervised by their parents.
Because most of the children have slow and short judgement so parents help their children.
>> Because most of the children have poor judgement, parents can help their children when they shop.
If there is some goods that children want to buy, then the children who have short judgement may buy them without any thinks.
>> If they are left unsupervised, they might just buy any goods without a second thought.
In addition, if children can buy anything without any intervention of parents, they could buy something that even the price is 100$.
>> In addition, if children buy anything without their parents\' supervision, they might end up buying products worth $100.
I think it can have a bad influence to children\'s sense of economy.
>> I think it can affect how children see money.
In conclusion, I think parents should help their children to buy something for proper price.
>> In conclusion, I think parents should help their children when buying something to avoid overspending.
- Teacher Debbie
Homework: Do you think kids should be allowed by their parents to shop online without their supervision? Why or why not?
In my opinion, children have to be allowed by their parents.
>> In my opinion, children should be supervised by their parents.
Because most of the children have slow and short judgement so parents help their children.
>> Because most of the children have poor judgement, parents can help their children when they shop.
If there is some goods that children want to buy, then the children who have short judgement may buy them without any thinks.
>> If they are left unsupervised, they might just buy any goods without a second thought.
In addition, if children can buy anything without any intervention of parents, they could buy something that even the price is 100$.
>> In addition, if children buy anything without their parents\' supervision, they might end up buying products worth $100.
I think it can have a bad influence to children\'s sense of economy.
>> I think it can affect how children see money.
In conclusion, I think parents should help their children to buy something for proper price.
>> In conclusion, I think parents should help their children when buying something to avoid overspending.
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