Paris Olympic: Environmental Friendly or Wealthy Friendly
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The most important slogan of Paris 2024 Olympic is to make the most sustainable Olympic ever. The main goal is to halve the carbon footprint compared to the average of previous summer games. However, there has been large controversies related to this objective, especially for air conditioning. The cooling system is the biggest contributor to the global warming. Therefore, Paris Olympic Committee decided to design buildings to withstand heat rather than the cooling system. This measure is soon turned out to be ineffective to counterattack ferocious heatwaves of Paris summer. Many countries have decided to either elect portable air conditioning units or look for different residences to host their athletes. This chaos eventually led inequality between and within countries. For example, Korea swimming association only allowed few male athletes with medal expectation to stay in hotel while other swimming athletes had to stay in Olympic Residence.
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Thank you for this information Aciel. It\'s kind of disappointing to hear issues like this happened. Regardless, congratulations to Korea for doing well in this Summer Olympics.
The most important slogan of Paris 2024 Olympic is to make the most sustainable Olympic ever.
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>>> OR: The most significant slogan of Paris Summer Olympics 2024 is to make the most sustainable Olympics ever.
The main goal is to halve the carbon footprint compared to the average of previous summer games.
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However, there has been large controversies related to this objective, especially for air conditioning.
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The cooling system is the biggest contributor to the global warming.
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Therefore, Paris Olympic Committee decided to design buildings to withstand heat rather than the cooling system.
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>>> OR: Therefore, Paris Olympic Committee decided to design buildings to withstand heat rather than installing a cooling system.
This measure is soon turned out to be ineffective to counterattack ferocious heatwaves of Paris summer.
>>> This measure is soon turned out to be ineffective to counterattack the ferocious heatwaves of Paris summer.
Many countries have decided to either elect portable air conditioning units or look for different residences to host their athletes.
>>> OR: Many countries have decided to either install portable air conditioning units or look for different residences to host their athletes.
This chaos eventually led inequality between and within countries.
>>> This chaos eventually led to inequality between and within countries.
For example, Korea swimming association only allowed few male athletes with medal expectation to stay in hotel while other swimming athletes had to stay in Olympic Residence.
>>> For example, Korean swimming association only allowed few male athletes who are highly likely to get a medal to stay in hotel while other swimming athletes had to stay in Olympic Residence.
>>> OR: For example, Korean swimming association only allowed few male athletes who have potentials to get a medal to stay in hotel while other swimming athletes had to stay in Olympic Residence.
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