part 2

2022-04-22 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was 21 years old, I had a presentation assignment in my school major class. Of course, that is group project. The groups were randomly divided into groups of people I\'ve never seen before because it’s covid-19. There are 3 members including me. We had to make a presentation for the purpose of preview the contents of the class, so we had to make it easy and specific. We divided the work into 3 main categories first. There were coding, having a presentation, and making a slide deck. I take on making the slide deck. I was worried that someone ignored the call or do it roughly, but it was not. We kept exchanging feedback with each other. The communication was very well. I was nervous when I finished making the slide deck and sent it to the members, but I remember the moment when they liked it, saying, \"Wow, it\'s really well made.\" I was so relieved and happy. Because it was really hard to make it. I said I would make it because I was confident, but I regretted it while making it.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kate!
You put a lot of effort into this.
I was impressed.
Let\'s talk about it more in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
When I was 21 years old, I had a presentation assignment in my school major class.
>> When I was 21 years old, I had to prepare a presentation for class.
Of course, that is group project. 
>> Of course, that was a group project. 
The groups were randomly divided into groups of people I\'ve never seen before because it’s covid-19. 
>> The groups were randomly divided into groups of people I\'ve never seen before because of the pandemic.
There are 3 members including me. 
>> There were 3 members in the group including me. 
We had to make a presentation for the purpose of preview the contents of the class, so we had to make it easy and specific. 
>> We had to make a presentation for the purpose of giving a preview of the class curriculum, so we had to make it easy and specific. 
We divided the work into 3 main categories first. 
>> Correct
There were coding, having a presentation, and making a slide deck. 
>> They were coding, creating the presentation, and making a slide deck. 
I take on making the slide deck. 
>> I took on the task of making the slide deck. 
I was worried that someone ignored the call or do it roughly, but it was not. 
>> I was worried that someone might ignore calls or do her task carelessly but those things didn\'t happen.
We kept exchanging feedback with each other. 
>> Correct
The communication was very well. 
>> The communication was very good.
I was nervous when I finished making the slide deck and sent it to the members, but I remember the moment when they liked it, saying, \"Wow, it\'s really well made.\" 
>> Correct
I was so relieved and happy. 
>> Correct
Because it was really hard to make it.
>> Correct
I said I would make it because I was confident, but I regretted it while making it.
>>  I said I would make it because I was confident, but I was regretting while making it.

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