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As I told you, most of people including students are interested in gathering money. And many people's dream is winning the lottery. This trend will affect the future of korea badly. Students will focus on the money than studying. Workers think about investment in stocks rather than working. Eventually , korea's competitiveness will be weak. Money is important to live , but there are other things more important than money. We shouldn't forget love, family,friends and so on which we can't buy with money.

Thankn you so much my dear for your composition..^^ Its nice to know that you know the value of other things more important than money..:) Anyway job well done my dear and talk to you later.. T.Cam   As I told you, most of people including students are interested in gathering money.>>correct! >>As I told you most people including students are interested in earning money.And many people's dream is winning the lottery.>>correct!This trend will affect the future of korea badly.>>correct (Korea)Students will focus on the money than studying.>>Students will focus on money rather than studying.Workers think about investment in stocks rather than working.>>correct!Eventually , korea's competitiveness will be weak.>>correct! (Korea)Money is important to live , but there are other things more important than money.>>correct!We shouldn't forget love, family,friends and so on which we can't buy with money. >>correct!