part1-2
학생이 쓴 원문
• Tell me about your hometown?
My hometown is Gyerong, there are peaceful and relaxing. It is know as a military headquarters, my dad is working there. And Gyeryong mountain is a big feature, too.
• How would you compare your hometown to Jochiwon?
Gyeryong is better than Jochiwon. Gyeryong continues to develop, and it will have a lot more places to play. And my all friends are in there.
• What are you like?
I’m bright and … I’m a morning person, and I’m the type to make plans.
• What is your idea of an enjoyable weekend?
I think an enjoyable weekend is to play outside, not at home. Of course, I like to lie on bed, but I get more excited when I play outside. I like talking with friends at café, and eating in restaurants.
• What qualities do you admire in your parents?
My father is so sweet, it is help moods harmonious, and My mother is wise and always gives me the right advice. I learn many things to learn from them.
omg it\'s too full to write..
강사 첨삭
Hi Kate!
Practice this on your own first.
I\'ll give you a sample on how to say it in class.
I\'ll see you later!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Tell me about your hometown?
>> Tell me about your hometown.
My hometown is Gyerong.
My hometown is Gyerong.
>> Correct
there are peaceful and relaxing.
>> It is peaceful and relaxing there.
It is know as a military headquarters, my dad is working there.
>> It is known for its military headquarters and, actually, my dad is working there.
And Gyeryong mountain is a big feature, too.
>> Gyeryong mountain is a big attraction, too.
How would you compare your hometown to Jochiwon?
How would you compare your hometown to Jochiwon?
>> Correct
Gyeryong is better than Jochiwon.
Gyeryong is better than Jochiwon.
>> Correct
Gyeryong continues to develop, and it will have a lot more places to play.
>> Gyeryong continues to develop, and soon, it will have a lot more places for recreation.
And my all friends are in there.
>> All my friends are there, too.
What are you like?
What are you like?
>> Correct
I’m bright and … I’m a morning person, and I’m the type to make plans.
I’m bright and … I’m a morning person, and I’m the type to make plans.
>> I’m bright and I’m a morning person, and I’m also the type who likes making plans.
What is your idea of an enjoyable weekend?
What is your idea of an enjoyable weekend?
>> Correct
I think an enjoyable weekend is to play outside, not at home.
I think an enjoyable weekend is to play outside, not at home.
>> I think an enjoyable weekend is to get out of the house and have fun in different places.
Of course, I like to lie on bed, but I get more excited when I play outside.
>> Of course, I like lying on the bed but I get more excited when I go out.
I like talking with friends at cafe and eating in restaurants.
>> I like talking with friends at cafes and eating in restaurants.
What qualities do you admire in your parents?
What qualities do you admire in your parents?
>> Correct
My father is so sweet, it is help moods harmonious.
My father is so sweet, it is help moods harmonious.
>> My father is so sweet and he keeps the atmosphere light and comfortable.
My mother is wise and always gives me the right advice.
>> My mother is wise and she always gives me the right advice in every situation.
I learn many things to learn from them.
>> I learn many things from them.
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