Part4 compositiom
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello Miss. [Name], this is Hong from Hotel Suite.
I received your message stating that you forgot to bring(left) your hand carry bag during last night's stay and asking whether we are keeping it.
after checking the lost and found list of our hotel,
I found the bag that is same with your description which was discovered while cleaning the room you occupied last night.
as for taking the bag again, we suggest you two options.
first,you can visit our hotel at any time you are available to pick it up,
we'll hand it back immediately.
second, if you want it to be delievered, we can send it to you through cash on delivery.
please inform us of the way you would like to resolve the situation.
강사 첨삭
The message for your customer was crafted nicely.
If I were your customer, I would recommend your
hotel to my friends.
From this composition, I can say that you are
a very accommodating person
and you have a kind heart.
Keep that personality
and it shall lead you to success.
Hello Miss. [Name], this is Hong from Hotel Suite.
>> Hello, Miss. [Name]! This is from Hotel Suite.
OR
>> Hello, Miss. [Name]! This is [이름] from Hotel Suite.I received your message stating that you forgot to bring(left) your hand carry bag during last night\'s stay and asking whether we are keeping it.>> I received your message informing us that you left your hand bag during your stay last night and you were asking if we have it.after checking the lost and found list of our hotel, I found the bag that is same with your description which was discovered while cleaning the room you occupied last night.
>> After checking the lost and found list of our hotel, I came across a bag which matches the description you gave us.
It was discovered while cleaning the room you occupied last night.
as for taking the bag again, we suggest you two options.
>> In order to retrieve the bag, we suggest two options for you:first,you can visit our hotel at any time you are available to pick it up,we\'ll hand it back immediately.>> First, you can visit our hotel at your most convenient time, and we\'ll hand it back immediately.
second, if you want it to be delievered, we can send it to you through cash on delivery. >> Second, we can send it to you through cash on delivery.please inform us of the way you would like to resolve the situation.
>> CORRECT
OR
>> Kindly inform us on how you would like to retrieve the item.
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