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2018-02-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi, teacher. My daughter Gachon University passed. I received the news yesterday. We paid Entrance fee and Tuition fee today. I`m having a happy time with my family.Today Lunar New year in Korea. My faimaly went to morther-in-law. After we had breakfast we went to in Jin hae morther house. Alltother gathered my sister and nephew .My younger sister running a coffee shop in Ma San. The family gathered and went to the there in the afternoon.There were many guests it was busy. There are downtown area center.We havd a good time and returned home.My nephew who came down Seoul goes up again late night. Have you good luck for a new year. Goodbye~^^

강사 첨삭

Hello there!!!

We really need to put our best foot forward to achieve a goal in our life.

I know it will be a long process but if we don\'t give up....we can be happy and successful!!!!

Have a great day ahead!!!!

T. Jeny


Hi, teacher.

>>correct
 My daughter Gachon University passed.

>>My daughter passed the test in Gachon University.

 I received the news yesterday.

>>correct
 We paid Entrance fee and Tuition fee today.

>>We paid the Entrance fee and Tuition fee today.
 I`m having a happy time with my family.Today Lunar New year in Korea.

>>correct
 My faimaly went to morther-in-law.

>>My family went to my mother-in-law\'s house.
 After we had breakfast we went to in Jin hae morther house.

>>After having breakfast we went to Jin Hae mother\'s house.
Alltother gathered my sister and nephew .

>>My sister and nephew gathered together.

My younger sister running a coffee shop in Ma San.

>>My younger sister is running a coffee shop in Ma San.

 The family gathered and went to the there in the afternoon.

>>My family gathered there in the afternoon.
There were many guests it was busy.

>>There were many guests  and they were busy.
There are downtown area center.

>>The coffee shop is located at the center of the town.

We havd a good time and returned home.

>>We had a good time and returned home.
My nephew who came down Seoul goes up again late night.

>>My nephew who came down Seoul went up late at night again.
 Have you good luck for a new year.

> May you have good luck for the new year.
Goodbye~^^

>>correct

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