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If you want to use a computor in the class, you have to type password.
Suddenly, my password couldn't operate the computor this morning.
I typed many times, but the computor couldn't work.
I asked a help to my co-woker and he called computor company and the technologist promised to visit my class.
And then I realized that my password that I typed this morning was wrong.
I always type the password every morning.
I can't belive how can I make the mistake.
I apolozied to the co-worker and then called to cancel the promise.
Thank you for your advice, Jessica.
I will try to read Harry Potter Series.^^
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If you want to use a computor in the class, you have to type password.
>>If you want to use a computer in the class, you have to type the password.Suddenly, my password couldn't operate the computor this morning.
>>Suddenly, my password couldn’t operate the computer this morning.
>>OR: Suddenly, my password couldn’t access the computer this morning.I typed many times, but the computor couldn't work.
>>I typed it many times, but I couldn’t access the computer.I asked a help to my co-woker and he called computor company and the technologist promised to visit my class.
>>I asked help from my co-worker and he called the computer company, so the technologist promised to visit my class.And then I realized that my password that I typed this morning was wrong.
>>And then I realized that the password that I typed this morning was wrong.I always type the password every morning.
>>correctI can't belive how can I make the mistake.
>>I can’t believe why I made that mistake.I apolozied to the co-worker and then called to cancel the promise.>>I apologized to my co-worker and then I called to the person who made the promise and cancelled it.Thank you for your advice, Jessica.
>>correctI will try to read Harry Potter Series.^^
>>I will try to read the Harry Potter series.
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