pastime

2019-07-09 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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My favorite pastime is cleaning. When I was middle school student, I cleaned a living room of my house. I started cleaning while my parents were in their workplace. By the time I finished cleaning, they arrived and came into home with lots of pleasure. I\'m so proud of my self as they praise me. After that occasion I cleaned my house in living room, bathroom, and shoe rack once a week. The more I clean my house, I feel comforable during cleaning since I could see every thing in my house going to be well arraneged. For that reason I enjoy to clean my house and it became one of my pastime. thank you for correcting my writting. I\'m happy with your correcting is based on my expression so I can easily improve my speaking and writing in my way. see you~~

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Thanks for doing your homework!

Have a great night! ☺

My favorite pastime is cleaning.

>> CORRECT

When I was middle school student, I cleaned a living room of my house.

>> I used to clean our living room when I was a middle school student.

I started cleaning while my parents were in their workplace.

>> I used to start cleaning when my parents were still at work.

By the time I finished cleaning, they arrived and came into home with lots of pleasure.

>> They arrive home with so much pleasure by the time I finished cleaning.

I\'m so proud of my self as they praise me.

>> I\'m so proud of myself as they praise me.

After that occasion I cleaned my house in living room, bathroom, and shoe rack once a week.

>> After that, I started cleaning the house once a week.

The more I clean my house, I feel comforable during cleaning since I could see every thing in my house going to be well arraneged.

>> The more I clean the house, the more I feel comfortable since I could see everything arranged at home.

For that reason I enjoy to clean my house and it became one of my pastime.
>> For that, I enjoy cleaning the house and it became one of my pastimes.

thank you for correcting my writting.

>> Thank you for correcting my writings.

I\'m happy with your correcting is based on my expression so I can easily improve my speaking and writing in my way.

>> I am happy that your corrections are based on my expressions so I can easily improve my speaking and writing skills.

see you~~

>> See you ~

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