Pastor Report 2

2021-11-09 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

I also have emailed congregants’ prayer requests on a weekly basis. I have encouraged them to pray for our congregants, especially those who are in need and suffering from pain. I have provided the Lord’s Table for those who are spiritually needed. I have shared photos and videos of my visitation in online worship services as well as in-person worship services to make connections among the congregation. I have sent birthday cards for all members to make them connected to the church. Faith Development: I have delivered and taught Wesleyan theology through my sermons. Mission and Service: I have helped the Happy Meal team from our congregation prepare meals and make visits to neighbors for their lunch meal service since I began serving at Henderson UMC. I have made a new church website and Facebook account to let people know about the ministry and mission program of Henderson UMC. New online platforms are a new way to connect with each other as a church.

강사 첨삭

I am also blessed by your writings, Han! May God bless you and your work abundantly! -Faith-
I also have emailed congregants’ prayer requests on a weekly basis. 
>> I would also email congregants’ prayer requests on a weekly basis. 
I have encouraged them to pray for our congregants, especially those who are in need and suffering from pain. 
>> CORRECT
OR I have encouraged them to pray for our congregants, especially those who are in need and afflicted brethren. 
I have provided the Lord’s Table for those who are spiritually needed. 
>> I have provided the Lord’s Table for those who are spiritually needy. 
I have shared photos and videos of my visitation in online worship services as well as in-person worship services to make connections among the congregation.
>> I have shared photos and videos of my visitation in our online worship services as well as in our in-person worship services to make connections among the congregation.
I have sent birthday cards for all members to make them connected to the church.
>> I have sent birthday cards to all members to make them connected to the church.
Faith Development: I have delivered and taught Wesleyan theology through my sermons.
>> CORRECT
Mission and Service: I have helped the Happy Meal team from our congregation prepare meals and make visits to neighbors for their lunch meal service since I began serving at Henderson UMC. 
>> Mission and Service: I have helped the Happy Meal team, which is from our congregation, prepare meals and make visits to neighbors for their lunch meal service since I began serving at Henderson UMC. 
I have made a new church website and Facebook account to let people know about the ministry and mission program of Henderson UMC. 
>> I have made a new church website and Facebook account to let people know about the ministry and mission programs of Henderson UMC. 
New online platforms are a new way to connect with each other as a church.
>> CORRECT
OR We are bound together by these new online platforms.

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