Pastor visited my house

2016-02-23 · 첨삭 강사 Kris

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Today's morning was busy morning.Because my church's intelligent Pastor visited my house.He visited my house almost 12.I ran an errand to buy a snack for the customer.I bought a snack, what's my mom's said.But someone told me to buy cheaper one.It was a same brand and it is cheaper than previous and there is more snack than previous snack.And I change the snack.After my church's Pastor visited my house with 4people.We preyed and Pastor said if I memorize something he will give some pocketmoeny.And I want to participate in April 4th travel.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^ :)

Wow! You had a very busy day because

you had a lot of visitors. :)

You were such a kind boy who entertained your visitors.

Your Pastor is very kind too I can tell. :)

Good luck on April 4. I want you to enjoy the trip.

See you in our class. :)


~~ Teacher Kris


Today\'s morning was busy morning.

>>Today\'s morning was very busy.

Because my church\'s intelligent Pastor visited my house.

>> My intelligent pastor from our church visited my house.

He visited my house almost 12.

>> He visited at almost 12 noon.

I ran an errand to buy a snack for the customer.

>> I ran an errand to buy some snacks for the visitor.

I bought a snack, what\'s my mom\'s said.

>> I bought some snacks because my mom told me so.

But someone told me to buy cheaper one.

>> But, someone told me to buy the cheaper one.

It was a same brand and it is cheaper than previous and there is more snack than previous snack.

>> It was the same brand and it was cheaper than the previous ones. And, there were a lot of snacks.

And I change the snack.

>> And, I changed the snacks.

After my church\'s Pastor visited my house with 4people.

>> After my Pastor left the house, another four people came for a visit.

We preyed and Pastor said if I memorize something he will give some pocket moeny.

>> We prayed and my pastor sad that if I could memorized something, he would give me pocket money.

And I want to participate in April 4th travel.

>> And, I want to participate on April 4 for the travel.

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