Patriarchal Society
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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on patriarchal society?
I don\'t really like patriarchal society because it is sexism.
In Korea, sexism is fading. But, there are still sexism in Korea.
I don\'t like sexism. Both Man and Woman is good person.
So, I don\'t like patriarchal society because It is like sexism(I don\'t like sexism)!
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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on patriarchal society?
I don\'t really like patriarchal society because it is sexism.
>> I don\'t really like a patriarchal society because it is a form of sexism.
In Korea, sexism is fading. But, there are still sexism in Korea.
>> In Korea, although sexism is fading, it still exists in many areas.
I don\'t like sexism. Both Man and Woman is good person.
>> I don\'t like sexism. I believe both Men and Women are equal and good people.
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