Penalty
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To tell the conclusion, I think that life imprisonment is better than the death penalty. Because, life imprisonment also can keep living, although I don\'t have freedom. And, I am afraid of death. To adopt the death penalty is difficult. If I stay in a prison for a long time, I will be crazy. At that time, I can adopt the death penalty. Sure, If I committed a crime as bad as getting death penalty, I would commit suicide. But, I am sure, I am not a bad guy as much as getting death penalty. So, I must survive to prove my innocence.
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To tell the conclusion, I think that life imprisonment is better than the death penalty.
>>> In my own conclusion, I think life imprisonment is better than the death penalty.
Because, life imprisonment also can keep living, although I don\'t have freedom.
>>> Life imprisonment means they can still keep on living, although they don\'t have freedom.
And, I am afraid of death. To adopt the death penalty is difficult.
>>> Personally, I am afraid of death. To be punished with the death penalty is difficult.
If I stay in a prison for a long time, I will be crazy.
>>> CORRECT
At that time, I can adopt the death penalty.
>>> At that time, I can adapt and accept the death penalty.
Sure, If I committed a crime as bad as getting death penalty, I would commit suicide.
>>> If I committed a crime as bad as being punished with the death penalty, I would commit suicide instead.
But, I am sure, I am not a bad guy as much as getting death penalty.
>>> But, I am sure, I am not a bad guy to be punished with the death penalty.
So, I must survive to prove my innocence.
>>> So, I must survive to prove my innocence if I didn\'t commit the crime.
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