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We have a common curiosity. Whenever bad event happen, we focus on that news. We didn't stop tailking until that event solved. Some kind of gossip. That's why some companies which always criticize famous people didn't go to ruin. Their bisiness propers even if that gossip was wrong. Why we like gossip? Just curiosity? I really wondered about that and tried to think alot. I found one thing. That is we always feel bored and look for something that raise our interests or we are so enegetic so we need someting to focus sometimes our problems but that focus didn't exist continuing everyday. Our problems are so ordinary and too conventional things, we need something make us fresh. Abd the effect of internet, we cannot help stopping to see it. curiosrity sometimes make somethig worse.

Hello there [이름]! I really enjoyed reading your composition! I like your topic because you discussed a very important issue that is happening in reality. Let us focus on your writing techniques. This composition is almost perfect but you have to improve on some areas so you can accomplish an amazing composition in the future. Here are my suggestions for you [이름]! You have to work on your grammar in sentence construction. Review on your subject-verb agreement. Observe correct spelling of words that you will write. Make use of transitional words to connect the thought of each sentence in your composition. Brush up on the correct usage of prepositions in sentences. Always try to achieve fluidity of the topic in your writing. Lastly, enhance your list of English vocabulary so that you can achieve variety in your composition which will make it more enticing to read. Other than that, you did a great job! Keep it up! I look forward in reading more of your compositions! We have a common curiosity. >> Correct! Whenever bad event happen, we focus on that news. >> Whenever bad events happen, we focus on that news. OR: Whenever a bad event happens, we focus on that news. We didn't stop tailking until that event solved. >> We don뭪 stop talking about it until that event is solved. Some kind of gossip. >> It is like some kind of gossip. That's why some companies which always criticize famous people didn't go to ruin. >> That뭩 why some companies who always criticize famous people don뭪 get ruined. Their bisiness propers even if that gossip was wrong. >> Their business prospers even if that gossip is wrong. Why we like gossip? >> Why do we like gossip? Just curiosity? >> Is it because of curiosity? I really wondered about that and tried to think alot. >> I really wondered about that so I tried to think of reasons. I found one thing. >> Correct! OR: I found one. That is we always feel bored and look for something that raise our interests or we are so enegetic so we need someting to focus sometimes our problems but that focus didn't exist continuing everyday. >> We always feel bored so we look for something to raise our interests. We are very energetic so we need something to focus on other than our problems. But that focus doesn뭪 continue existing everyday. Our problems are so ordinary and too conventional things, we need something make us fresh. >> Our problems are so ordinary and too conventional that is why we need something to make us feel fresh. Abd the effect of internet, we cannot help stopping to see it. >> Another reason is the internet because we cannot stop people who want to see it. curiosrity sometimes make somethig worse. >> Curiosity sometimes makes something worse than it truly is.