People are becoming too dependent on the Internet and phone.
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ESSAY: People are becoming too dependent on the Internet and phone. Is it a positive or negative development?
I think the development is more negative than positive.
People can search any information they need to know on the internet and phone anytime and anywhere.
However, people can easily trust wrong information on the internet and phone, so fraud damage through phishing is increasing.
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I think the development is more negative than positive.
>>> I think disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
People can search any information they need to know on the internet and phone anytime and anywhere.
People can search any information they need to know on the internet and phone anytime and anywhere.
>>> CORRECT~! ^^
However, people can easily trust wrong information on the internet and phone, so fraud damage through phishing is increasing.
However, people can easily trust wrong information on the internet and phone, so fraud damage through phishing is increasing.
>>> CORRECT~! ^^
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