People are living in a ‘throwaway society’, using things for a short time and then throwing them awa

2020-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Most countries solved the problem of food, clothing, and shelter. People don\'t live only for it these days. They try to find more interesting things to do and also feel easily board what they do. We are living in competitive society, as a result companies make cheaper items than their rival company. As customers sights, they try to find items which is cheap and have good quality. But many things and services don\'t meet the expectation of customers. So, people tend to throw it away and then purchase new items. I think these practice cause the environmental and financial problems. It also cause excessive consumption and impulse buying. A lot of professionals have addressed environmental problem because of garbage that generated by human. I believe that if we don\'t try to keep clean our earth, our nation will be destroyed. I hope we all try to not to throw trash away and we save our valuable nature.

강사 첨삭

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Most countries solved the problem of food, clothing, and shelter. 
>>> Most countries have solved the problems with food, clothing, and shelter. 
People don\'t live only for it these days. 
>>> CORRECT
They try to find more interesting things to do and also feel easily board what they do.
>>> They try to find more interesting things to do and also feel easily bored on what they do.
 We are living in competitive society, as a result companies make cheaper items than their rival company.
>>> CORRECT
 As customers sights, they try to find items which are cheap and have good quality. 
>>> CORRECT
But many things and services don\'t meet the expectation of customers.
>>> CORRECT
So, people tend to throw it away and then purchase new items. 
>>> CORRECT
I think these practice cause the environmental and financial problems. 
>>> CORRECT
It also cause excessive consumption and impulse buying.
>>> It also cause excessive consumption and impulsive buying.
 A lot of professionals have addressed environmental problems because of garbage that generated by humans.
>>> CORRECT
I believe that if we don\'t try to keep the earth clean, our nation will be destroyed. 
>>> CORRECT
I hope we all try to not to throw trash away and we save our valuable nature.
>>> I hope we\'ll all try not to throw trashes away and save our valuable nature.

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