People feeling

2011-10-25 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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i think those who have equivalent own valued. if i were disable, it's equivalent felt. i don't know other Nations detailed. it's News or newpapers through Media what i knew all things. in some ways,Korea is convenient to live,for example welfare, Nation Income,from now on plans. Major Company or Small Business organiztion have increasingly occurred many problems, first, Income problem is that low-income increase,middle income is decling and High income increase. these are sayings that increasingly the issue about the gap between the rich and the poor it's becoming serious. it's so sad story. the second problem is human right. i think this problem should try extra hard. our nation is being under a flag of truce.

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Hi [이름],            I'n grateful for your composition. Keep practicing. Let's talk later! i think those who have equivalent own valued. >>I think those who are the same have equivalent value.if i were disable, it's equivalent felt.>>If I was disabled, I will have the same feeling.i don't know other Nations detailed. >>I'm not aware of other nation's detail.it's News or newpapers through Media what i knew all things.>>It's through the media or newspaper that I get information.in some ways,Korea is convenient to live,for example welfare, Nation Income,from now on plans. >>In  some ways  it is good to live in Korea, for example, welfare income is already planned.Major Company or Small Business organiztion have increasingly occurred many problems, >>Major Company or Small Business organization has increasingly occurred many problems.first, Income problem is that low-income increase,middle income is decling and High income increase. >>The first problem is low-income ratio increased, miffle-income ratio decreases and high income ratio increased.these are sayings that increasingly the issue about the gap between the rich and the poor it's becoming serious. >>These are facts that increase the gap between rich and poor people.it's so sad story. >>It's a sad story.The second problem is human right. >>Correcti think this problem should try extra hard. >>I think this problem is extremely hard.our nation is being under a flag of truce. >>Our country is under a flag of truce.

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