People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don\'t take
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I was touched to hear about the reason why we have to cast our vote. The instructor appeared on TV said that there will be no changes with my vote but it means for me to show how I am. I can give significance about myself and I think it will help me gain correct values. It also make me have interests to politics. I think this approach can be effective to encourage people to protect our environment. It would be good to create campaign video and if it touches people, people are willing to participate this campaign actively. People would like to give meaning to what they are seeking and most people want to be ones who make world or their countries better places by helping them. Another way to encourage people is giving money or goods if people actively take their responsibilities. Even though, there are a lot of reports have been published regarding crisis of earth, people don\'t know if it will influence our lives because there are still many things we have to care in our life.
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Hi Mr. [이름]~! ^^ Never give up, never give in, and when the upper hand is ours, may we have the ability to handle the win with the dignity that we absorbed the loss. If you can’t outplay them, outwork them! ~^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I was touched to hear about the reason why we have to cast our vote.
>>> CORRECT
The instructor appeared on TV said that there will be no changes with my vote but it means for me to show how I am.
>>> The instructor appeared on TV said that there will be no changes with my vote but it means a lot for me to show my participation society.
I can give significance about myself and I think it will help me gain correct values.
>>> CORRECT
It also make me have interests to politics.
>>> It also makes me have interests to politics.
I think this approach can be effective to encourage people to protect our environment.
>>> CORRECT
It would be good to create campaign video and if it touches people, people are willing to participate this campaign actively.
>>> It would be good to create campaign videos and if it touches people, people could be willing to participate in this campaign actively.
People would like to give meaning to what they are seeking and most people want to be ones who make world or their countries better places by helping them.
>>> People would like to give meaning to what they are seeking and most people want to be ones who make the world or their countries be better places by helping them.
Another way to encourage people is giving money or goods if people actively take their responsibilities.
>>> CORRECT
Even though, there are a lot of reports have been published regarding crisis of earth, people don\'t know if it will influence our lives because there are still many things we have to care in our life.
>>> Even though, there are a lot of reports which have been published regarding earth crisis, people don\'t know if it will influence our lives because there are still many things we have to take care in our life.
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